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Tuesday, 8 August 2017

It's The Little Things

 I am learning to write a piece of prose-  a sketch with detailed words, about a particular place, that is very important to me
I know I have achieved this when I can describe this sketch of the place,in specific detail. To do this I need to:
- Use specific nouns
- Activate the nouns with strong verbs

The Garden
The aroma of the flowers emerging from the ground filling my, nose with joy. In the back corner of the yard, the golden sun was glistening off the glass house. All around me are fruit trees with their branches careening and bushes trembling in the wind. In the middle of the yard/garden I have a prodigious view of the farm and nature around me. Birds are warbling continuously to each other, bees were embarking on to their next flower, clovers are overpopulating the grass and tomatoes are busily ripening in the glass house.
My dog scampering happily under the close eye of the summer sun - the most beautiful sight of all.   
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6 comments:

  1. Unknown8 August 2017 at 18:11

    Greetings Megan,
    One again Megan you have out did yourself.
    This is such a great story that I can imagine myself there.
    I love the sentence I have a prodigious view of the farm and nature around me.

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  2. Anonymous9 August 2017 at 09:39

    Hi Megan.

    You did a great blog post.
    I saw them as if they were alive.
    Why did you write about “ garden”.


    Kind regards Ian.

    Canterbury
    Yaldhurst Model School.

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    1. Anonymous10 August 2017 at 13:05

      Hi Ian,

      Thank you so much for your comment and it is great you could picture where I am. I chose to write about my garden because it is the first place that came to mind that I felt happy.
      What place do you feel happiest?

      Megan
      Year 8
      Drummond Primary School

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  3. Anonymous16 August 2017 at 10:23

    Hi Megan,

    thanks for replying to my comment.
    Good question, my happy place is my trampoline because it makes me feel calm and happy, plus it gives me ideas.

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  5. Anonymous17 August 2017 at 10:02

    Hi there Megan,
    You writing was amazing and the describing words that you have used like embarking and trembling. I think that you have done a real great job with your writing, what do you think you could do next time to make people want to read it?
    Kind regards,
    Parwin

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1. Something positive - something you like about what I have shared.
2. Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what I had to say
3. Something thoughtful - how have you connected with my learning? Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.

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