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Tuesday, 1 August 2017

Memoir Poem #2

Today I wrote another memoir poem. We had to use a A.N.V(Adjective,Noun,Verb) chart and then add other words to make it a proper sentence. I chose to write my poem in Shmuels (from The Boy In The Striped Pyjamas) point of view. I hope you really enjoy my poem.


The concentration camp was lifeless enough, there was an old pile of wood planks, a couple of aging huts and a barb wire fence surrounding the innocent men and little boys.
A rusty wheelbarrow traveling in my hands, there were underprivileged Jews laboring all around me and evil Nazis surrounding the fence.
Horrible smelling, gloomy smoke drifting above us, an ear-popping whistle signalling us to come back and terrifying guns firing in the distance.
Languid, Depressed, Hopeless,
while doing nothing important but hoping for a brighter future.
I wonder...
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8 comments:

  1. Unknown1 August 2017 at 16:16

    Megan this is one of the best pieces I have read so far. Intriguing poem,
    which makes me want to watch this movie

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  2. Anonymous2 August 2017 at 11:18

    I agree with Mum Megan
    Nice job of really working hard to be descriptive, capturing the scene and situation you find yourself in as this character

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  3. Anonymous2 August 2017 at 12:03

    Hi Megan
    This is a great poem. I liked how you described what was going on and your adjectives painted a picture in my head.
    Cormac
    Year 6
    Drummond Primary School

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  4. Anonymous2 August 2017 at 12:22

    Hi Megan,
    Nice poem! I like the sentence you did about the wheelbarrow, it makes you understand who your doing it about.

    Emma
    RM4
    Drummond

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  5. Anonymous2 August 2017 at 12:24


    Hi Megan,

    I really liked your poem there were heaps and heaps of descriptive words what is your favorite scene and why also it's really realistic great job

    Flynn

    Room 4

    Year 7

    Drummond Primary School







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  6. Anonymous2 August 2017 at 12:33

    Hi Megan,

    I like it. Very descriptive word.
    It's so good I can think of anything you need to work on.
    Good job!
    Why did you do this part? Who are you doing it about?

    Danni
    Rm 4
    Yr 6
    Drummond

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  7. Anonymous3 August 2017 at 11:14

    Hi Megan

    I really liked your poem. I had lots of good words. What was your favourite part of the movie

    Carey
    Year6
    Drummond school

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    1. Anonymous3 August 2017 at 16:15

      Hi Carey,

      Thank you so much for your comment. My favorite part of the movie would have to be when Gretel was flirting with Lieutenant Kotler.

      Megan
      Year 8
      Drummond Primary School

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